xanthan gum

I enjoyed this - I almost shared feelings with the speaker...or the present speaker...or whatever. But I—I felt it like a gale. I loved this line. i suppose it's the ...

I think the rhythm in this was pretty prominent, and so it was awkward when something was off-rhythm...a short line, a long line, ect. I think you should crop down ...

This was far too repetitive. You could've had summed all this up in one line - basically it was the same thing over and over again with various but not ...

getting more aggresive getting more violent. getting...? it sounds so harsh aganist the beautiful pulse you were trying to create. otherwise, i thought this was great.

I think this needs a stronger beginning, as it's a bit airy. I understand the feeling, and you get it by the end but you linger in description so long ...

Wow. I think you've finally nailed it. This has the same feeling that attracted me to your poetry in the first place. My own plea is to use a BIT ...

I agree with Snoink that that line didn't exactly...flow as much of the rest of the poem did. I wouldn't be so picky if it weren't for the fact that ...

It has a perfect and complex rhythm, which is rare and quite a pleasure, but besides that it confused me and didn't touch me at all. Although I got the ...

Don't change the last line...or at least, don't change it to that. I think it's fine how it is. This is simple, yet good. I enjoyed this poem because it ...

Wow. When I read the beginning, I actually winced. "Another beginner poet...I'll probably have to give them the THIS ISN'T A POEM talk," I thought. Thankfully, you proved me wrong. ...

Have an open mind, please. First of all, I am personally torn in this arguement. From a purely financial point of view, the illegal immigrants are wounding our economy. Yes, ...

A tapestry of green grass hair runs thick beneath a maiden's thigh, the luscious drops of golden daylight ordained with the fruits of colors, and the warmth in melodic, silver ...

Suburbia A storm is coming Skittled rocks on river pavement In a mesh of bloodshed hair Tongues secured in thin glass windows The blooming blossoms, yielding pears Blown in cancer ...

The rhythm and rhyme didn't annoy me - they actually added to the feeling of the poem. I believe you are improving, but I think that you should start to ...